Amor.

Much appreciated!

Nope, I've only used English medium for my pieces.

It sounded better when I translate it to Malay but a bit upside down when I read it in English. I like the message inside but I need something more for the community.

Like thousand a march made me confused. Just a suggestion, would it be better if, Like a thousand march... What do you think?

I see, I bet you're not that familiar with Shakespearean sonnets? This piece is inspired by the late great writer's technique in some sorts.

No. I have heard of Shakespeare but I haven't read a lot of his writing. Which sonnet are you referring to? Let me give it a read and I'll read yours again.

Every sonnet; Take note of the measurements though. Just like his writing in Old English, I jumbled words that may sound really off with the proper grammar standards to make it sound more archaic. Making the reader have the time to decipher the piece with his/her own understanding.

If you mean William Shakespeare, I love his sonnet 18. He is not writing jumbled words. It is very organized and expresses beautifully.

I'm not saying he's jumbling words, I jumbled words to make it sound archaic like he does.

Old English and modern English combined.

Let me read it again.

It's okay if it's not your type of a piece, my works are mostly inclined by the self interpretation of the readers at the same time, giving them the chance to discern what I really want to perceive.

If it is not my type of piece, I will not spend my time to comment and reply to you.

Do not be discouraged by my words. I spent time for you because I believe that you are good.

I get your point. I am deeply humbled, thank you.

I am starting to get your points of view.

For the first paragraph, I still think that it sounds better if it goes as like a thousand match and remove ever from would ever.

The second paragraph, I have to read it on one breath to get the hidden mean in.

For the last part, I love it.

This is merely my opinion as your reader and moderator of SST: Poems.

I appreciate your opinion, thank you very much, your criticism would really help me in my improvement.