Count to Ten

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4 years ago

One

You feel your tears run

Two

There's no one but you

Three

You try to break free

Four

You struggle some more

Five

Try to keep yourself alive

Six

You fall on leaves and sticks

Seven

You feel your pain worsen

Eight

It already too late

Nine

You know you'll never be fine

Ten

You died in vain

Then you wake up in the cabin

And you're tied up again

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One of the best poems I read so far here. This is clear poetry, a poem most people will understand and who knows they might even like reading and writing it.

It reminds me of the schoolyard. ..

I think @heartbeat1515 and @marblely might like this too.

If you like to post in a community you might consider Freewriting or Poems.

SYT: Poems https://read.cash/c/syt-poems-bd19

Freewriting https://read.cash/c/freewriting-c99e

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4 years ago

Oh, thank you very much. I will do that when I write another one. And thank you again for reading.

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4 years ago

You are welcome. I'll follow you and will read you again. Keep writing. What you write here is to promote you, your skills not only here but to the outside world as well. 🍀💕

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4 years ago

Thanks, that makes me feel a bit better. 🙂

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4 years ago

Stick around with the good writers, read each other. You read and commented me which made me read, like, comment and follow you. There are good writers here. Hopefully more will join, a part will grow into writing. 🍀

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4 years ago

I'm also hoping that more writers join. Thank you very much for your time.

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4 years ago

👍

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4 years ago

Thanks for the upvote too. It kinda makes me sad that only a few people read my work. I'm grateful that you read mine.

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4 years ago

It makes me sad good writers are ignored. We try to change that with our communities and go for quality not quantity.

The community freewriting hosted the first writing contest here. Pity you joined later. We hope to have some more contests but the money for that needs to be earned first plus it has to help the "underdogs" here to be noticed.

If you scroll through my account you can find those posts back I wrote where I asked users/participants to read each other. Great posts are ignored because no one reads. The main group of users upvotes for a different reason.

Perhaps they can not read well enough to recognize something good? 🤔

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4 years ago

It makes me happy that you liked my work. Maybe they just don't like the messages that I put in mine. Which actually isn't common since I'm writing about death, broken dreams, and my own depression.

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4 years ago

The first problem will be the high amount of accounts 11k) and the high quantity of short notes and "articles". It's hard to be noticed and if we all stay on our island we will not discover new or better articles. You need to search for it and as a writer, you need to promote yourself. The best way is by reading and commenting on others. I rather read what you write than the fake messages and nonsense shared. You might call yourself a writer for fun but you are a writer and a creative one. Don't let others tell you what to write, how to write especially not if it comes to poetry. You are creative and certain feelings are needed to express in the way you do. It's not different from writing song texts. If I add music to what you wrote the whole world loves it. A sponsor is nice but ask yourself if it's worth promoting someone if a/he doesn't read, comment, appreciate you. Write for you, it's the best thing you can do for you. Each writer has his own audience it just takes time to find it.

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4 years ago

I guess you're right. Guess I've been looking for audience in wrong places.

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4 years ago

Your audience will come. 🍀💕

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4 years ago

Yep, thanks for your words of encouragement. I really appreciate it

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4 years ago

You are welcome.

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4 years ago

Don't give up easily.

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4 years ago

I won't. Thanks for reading.

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4 years ago

@wakeupkitty is right. Don't be discouraged. You will find your audience in time, friends even. You have us now supporting your work :) Just continue writing because you want to write and it is your passion and channel to release your emotions.

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4 years ago

I will, thanks :)

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4 years ago

Yes I did. @Iremori is good. Thank you for calling us here too. Glad I read them.

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4 years ago

This is really cool @Iremori. My first thought was the school's nursery rhyme but this is well beyond and darker than a nursery rhyme. It felt a bit like Blair Witch Project. You can sing this too, come to think of it and join @heartbeat1515's Share Your Talents Community: https://read.cash/c/share-your-talents-f01d :) Glad we have you here!

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4 years ago

I haven't watched Blair Witch yet, but it seems interesting. I'll watch it someday. I'll do my best to make more poems like this. Thanks.

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4 years ago

It will make a great children's song for kindergarten. Since we don't have kindergarten we'll teach it to the 2.5-4 year old toddlers. 😄

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4 years ago

A song that teaches how to count and learn a little bit of life.

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4 years ago

And how to survive in kindergarten if mom leaves 😢

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4 years ago

I haven't been there yet. Someday I will understand the feelings.

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You won't your child might and if not you might not like it 😄

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😅 That sounds like a scary future but I am going to face it with a smile. Hopefully 😅

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4 years ago

Time to let go 👋

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That is the one part that I do not how I will face it. Will I be brave or will I be depressed.

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4 years ago

You will find it normal.

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4 years ago

I believe you.

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4 years ago

Thanks for promoting the community. I do need a new songs for the community. I haven't been able to write one myself. The community is drifting.

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4 years ago

Most who sings, would be able to sing cover songs but writing, composing and singing own songs does require some special talent like yours and I worry not many will be able to.

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4 years ago

I believe there are some hidden talents here. Hopefully they come fowards. I also not very good myself.

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4 years ago

Um, I'm kind of good at writing and singing songs

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4 years ago

I will be happy to listen to your original songs in Share Your Talent community.

https://read.cash/c/share-your-talents-f01d

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4 years ago

Thanks, @wakeupkitty for calling me here. You are right, I like reading this.

My first impression is ouch, ouch and ouch. It reminds me of a movie. Cabin in the woods 🤔 It is sad and painful especially a repetitive situation.

The feelings are expressed beautifully.

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4 years ago

Thanks. I did think of Cabin in the Woods as the inspiration.

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4 years ago

You're welcome. I would be glad to have this in SYT: Poems.

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