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My Love pt. 2
You must read part 1 first! 🤗 Here's the link: https://read.cash/@glossyberrycraze/my-love-bfb3390c One two three I exhaled loudly Four years have past Time flies so fast Five six seven, I miss you, you in heaven Seven eight nine, You are still mine Now on ten, Again my love, until then. Here's part 2! 😆 If you liked this poem, you may like and subscribe 🤗 You can also leave meaningful comments. They'll be so much appreciated! ❤️ Thank you 😘 I'm also glad to join **"Get Sponsored !!"** community. https://read.cash/c/get-sponsored-2a0b The idea of community is to sponsor quality content creators & reward community members for their activities. Join if you want to **"Get Sponsored !!"** https://read.cash/c/get-sponsored-2a0b Thank you **@Ashma** for giving us such opportunity 🤗 https://read.cash/@Ashma
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That seems to be a teenager rhyming. Keep it up
thank you for this! 🤗
MAS LALONG SUMAKIT HAHAHA
HAHAHAHA sorry ulit 🤧 at thank you na rin hahaha 😆
Why always a tragic ending 😔
😅😅😅
Waahhh bat namn ganunnn sonteken keta dyan huehue
I can not say I like it. It misses something. Recognition, a touch of the heart, something to laugh about perhaps. Writing poetry isn't easy if you do not speak the language well unless you are willing to study poetry, know how words are pronounced and how you can catch people with words.
Poetry is not just about having something you can laugh about, the main feeling the poet wants to convey is pain of lost and missing someone.
I know it is not just something to laugh about. I wrote I miss something... I miss the feeling no matter what feeling. It is as if you love to use as many of "academic" words as you can but the feeling, the message is not reaching me. These are just words, empty words to me. Not catchy, not touching. Words only are not making a poem but the way how they are used, the reader receives them. That is what I try to explain.
I understand that you didn't like it, of course we have our own interest and interpretation, but as i read your comment here and from her previous poem (part 1) you seem to be very offensive, if you don't like it okay no prob with that, if you want her to improve make your criticism a CONSTRUCTIVE one, be polite. Adding "cheap/worse" to your comment is way too mean.
And to make it clear, stop finding "something to laugh about" in my poem because I don't intend to make my readers laugh. With all due respect, if you understood the message of my poem, the girl died and the man is missing her. If it didn't reach you, or if it never gave you such "feelings", no problem. I don't intend to impress anyone with my poems/articles anyway. I write here to express myself. Thank you. 🙂
I have read part 1 and part 2. I seem to understand. Now it felt like they did not even get the chance to get married and the numbering starts again. It sounds to me that after 4 years, he or she still cannot move on and only waiting for life to end so that they can meet again? Did I get that right this time?
pretty welll. thank you so much :)