@glossyberrycraze
edited
more from that month
My Love
One two three, I counted when you said yes to me Four five six, Our 6th anniversary Seven eight nine, you are completely mine Now on number ten, We got engaged then Nine eight seven, You want many children Six five four, Wedding in an hour Three two one, Why are you gone My love, until then. This has part 2! 😊 Here's the link: https://read.cash/@glossyberrycraze/my-love-pt-2-6cc838f4 If you liked this poem, you may like and subscribe 🤗 You can also leave meaningful comments. They'll be so much appreciated! ❤️ Thank you 😘 I'm also glad to join **"Get Sponsored !!"** community. https://read.cash/c/get-sponsored-2a0b The idea of community is to sponsor quality content creators & reward community members for their activities. Join if you want to **"Get Sponsored !!"** https://read.cash/c/get-sponsored-2a0b Thank you **@Ashma** for giving us such opportunity 🤗 https://read.cash/@Ashma
18 comments
Hala ka man dyaannn 🥺 last part nalang nawala pa kala ko happy ending na ihhh
hahahaha try ko gawan to ng part 2 😂
Sigeeee usto ko🤧🤧
Yung ending talaga yung maskait e hahaha
hahahaha sori pu 🤧
It's more like a rhythm, one that doesn't rhyme everywhere. I try to figure out a certain rhythm or logic but can not find it. As a poem (no need for a poem to rhyme) it doesn't really touch me but who knows @heartbeat1515 knows more.
She has written a better one. Perhaps she wrote this one in a hurry because this too simple as what she always wrote.
Number two, the follow up is even cheaper/worse. Perhaps it is a joke although I don't see the fun part of it. I don't know but poetry is a certain way of writing and most of what I read here is no poetry.
I have seen a few good ones but my reading time is not as much as you.
I doubt it is the reading time. Can be we follow different people or have a different idea if it comes to poetry?
Perhaps we have different ideas but that is not bad. We have a lot of angles of views.
It sounds like he leaves because you don't want to give him children.
"I counted when you said yes to me" it's in the pov of the man, the girl is the one that leave him.
I think I better read the whole poetry or perhaps this poetry should be written in whole instead of pet one and part two. It gave me a different view from the original one.
This is the original one, that's why it's part 1. I wrote this first before I came up with the second part. Thanks 🙂
I have read part two. Just my opinion, because you repeat the counting it made the two poems doesn't connect. It would sound much better if you can do something to make it connect next time. Thank you for giving me a reply.
Also, check it's part 2, the girl doesn't leave because she want to, she's in heaven, a kind of lost that's totally devastating.
Alright. I search whole the whole poem.