Lay with me as clouds drift

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4 years ago

Lay with me in green grass

and look up to the blue sky.

Lay with me as clouds drift

and birds fly overhead .

Lay with me as time passes

and share stories of life .

Lay with me as almost stranger

and let me a friendship grow .

Lay with me

and become something more.

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It reminds me of the song "Chasing Cars" by Snow Patrol 💜 its a good song. I hope you can listen to it hehehe

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4 years ago

Indeed I think the grammar needs more attention.

I wonder if this is written in English or translated.

"Lay with me as almost stranger

and let me a friendship grow."

Here I read something that feels strange to me. How about:

Lay with me as (almost) strangers and let our friendship grow.

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4 years ago

The grammar use for the first line is a bit confusing. Do you mean on the grass instead of in the grass?

It sounded like you are forcing someone to lay down with you.

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