A warrior in the land of desperation

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when the skies starts raining embers on a man who used to live peacefully,deciding to torture him with all kinds of sufferance,making him running like a fool around searching for a way out,offering his body as a tribute to the claws of hunger, throwing him into the deep bottom of the swamp of misery,putting every obstacle you can and you can't imagine in his path....It's nothing but a living hell on earth; or so he thought...

In this bloody war they call life; everything has a hidden meaning in need to be found...What he called hell was meant to stimulate his mind,develop his skills,to increase his strength and creativity until he is able to make an exit from this situation without waiting for a hand,which will probably never come, to get him out of the mud he is sinking in..

Friend...warriors can't be born nor created,warriors are people who decided to build themselves using experience, their own and others mistakes,pain,misery and the ability to stand in front of the mirror to face their failure and say...This is not the end of it yet... Not every storm is destined to destroy your life,storms can strike you so bad sometimes,leaving you shaking,afraid of what is going to happen next,but when you go on,you will find out that those storms cleaned the way ahead of you; that's what we call the wind of fate. In the sea of life, let this wind push the sails of your ship and guide you toward your goal: to the land of warriors...

You took the tough decision and choosed to be one of the warriors then,you have my respect. But have you thought about what kind of warriors are you going to be in your adventure? A victorious warrior enters the battle last, ready for anything he might face and wins it first, the defeated one goes first to the batllefield carrying only the excitement he has, but he walks away defeated that's if he was able to stay alive at the first place...The real warrior will be responsible for his own acts,an ordinary man will make you responsible for his mistakes. The free warrior is independent because that's his free will, not because he was born that way, he knows how to use opportunities yet never let anyone use him. he can make a fire from ashes, turn the darkest times into a light of hope and strength. That kind of warriors,my friend,deserves to be crowned and named a king.

I can feel your hesitation now, you can't go back now after all the progress you have just made, the biggest weakness,my friend,is giving up. Power doesn't come from your physical strength,it only comes from an invincible will, a flame. No, a fire inside your chest that will leave no place for giving up. There is only one guarenteed way to succeed: try and try again,try and don't stop trying until you are there. Doubt can only see obstacles, but faith can only see the way of your goal.

The warrior's first weapon is his mind, make it sharp and use it to change your destiny. Follow the whispers of the destiny of the brave warriors and let those whispers take control,make them turn to a violent scream in the face of everyone who says:"you can't handle the upcoming hurricane."... Let that proud warrior inside shout :" i am the hurricane".

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Well it is an interesting article. But @hamefbkh, thanks for be patient with that person that corrected you. Learning never stop for an educated person.

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4 years ago

no need to thank me. that's what anyone will do i guess. he is helping me to get better and improve. i can only thank him really. thanks for reading !

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4 years ago

A good one again, @hamedbkh. But you have to think about punctuation to make this look good for the eye as well. No space before period, comma, semi-colon or colon, but always a space after. Except when you have three dots (...), then you can count them as one punctuation mark: empty space after.

I hope you don't mind me saying this, I just want to help you improve your texts.

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4 years ago

of course i don't mind it! actually i think i have to thank you for that. so you are welcome to correct me whenever you think there is something to be corrected. so in short you mean that the space is only after period, comma, semi-colon or colon right? PS: thanks for the tip! much appreciated my friend :D

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4 years ago

Yes, I think you mean right. Look at this example from your text:

Not every storm is destined to destroy your life,storms can strike you so bad sometimes,leaving you shaking,afraid of what is going to happen next,but when you go on,you will find out that those storms cleaned the way ahead of you; that's what we call the wind of fate. <<

Look at the commas. This sentence should be:

Not every storm is destined to destroy your life, storms can strike you so bad sometimes, leaving you shaking, afraid of what is going to happen next, but when you go on, you will find out that those storms cleaned the way ahead of you; that's what we call the wind of fate.

Or look at this sentence:

Let that proud warrior inside shout :" i am the hurricane".<< Look at the colon and the citation mark and that you must capitalise "I".

Should be

Let that proud warrior inside shout: "I am the hurricane". (British English) If you want to write American English, it should end with the period inside the citation. ..."I am the hurricane."

There are more similar errors, I think you can find them yourself.

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4 years ago

Oh alright. i guess i got it now. I will try and keep that in mind next time. I want to thank you for the detailed explanation! that's very kind of you!

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4 years ago

I am just going to say something about this and luckily you already did. I hope you don't mind we suggesting this @hamedbkh. This articles is a poem I believe, but it will look better with proper use of punctuation. As for example, your first paragraph...

when the skies starts raining embers... On a man who used to live peacefully... Deciding to torture him with all kinds of sufferance, Making him running like a fool around, Searching for a way out. Offering his body as a tribute to the claws of hunger! Throwing him into the deep bottom of the swamp of misery! Putting every obstacle you can and you can't imagine in his path.... It's nothing... But a living hell on earth... or so he thought.

I'm not that good either but I think it look nicer this way. What do you think.

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4 years ago

Yes. This was one of the first times I brought this up with hamedbkh, I didn't want to come with too much at the same time, so I focussed on the most obvious errors at first. If it is too much at one time, he would not absorb what I say anyway; learning must come in small regular steps.

But not 4 dots after path :)

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4 years ago

A warrior is really someone that loves others against adversity. In good times and bad times. Overcoming challenges and lifting others up! Jesus showed this on the cross. And now is risen as our Lord and Saviour!

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4 years ago

i respect your idea! thanks for your comment and for reading stay safe!

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