@bbang
Sense it.
*I closed the door behind me* *I ran towards him hurriedly* *Full of excitement, felicity* *It is like I forgot all my anxiety* *I hear it.* *I hear the crunch sound of dried leaves on my every step,* *the relaxing sound of trees as the breeze stir it* *and the sound of birds who beautifully chirped, tweet* *I feel it.* *I feel the wind moves every strand of my hair* *Ruining the braid I made so dear* *But I don't even really care* *Because I see it.* *I see him from afar smiling at me.* *Full of love, pure fancy* *I can see him clearly.* *He then begun walking towards me.* *I smell it.* *I smell his perfume, cologne maybe* *Why is he so lovely?* *He makes my heart go crazy* *Then, I tasted it.* *I taste the sweetness he brought* *His sweet 'lil glimpse I caught* *Those words coming from him I never thought,* *"Hey miss,* *I've got you some delivery."*
I hope you liked it! ❣️ I'm still a newbie in writing stuffs and it's my first time doing some poem that isn't for school purposes. I just did this one for fun and I'm feeling poet here right now hahaha. Well, not the "*poet*" in tagalog ha. It's kinda gross! 😂😆💩 `Here are some of my Written Works:` **Lost In Time** https://read.cash/@bbang/lost-in-time-845e7864 **Different Versions of YOU Exists in all of our Minds** https://read.cash/@bbang/different-versions-of-you-exists-in-all-of-our-minds-b53faa16
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Heeeyyyyy this is sweet but hilarious hahahahh why did you end it that way haha it's actually a good poem❤
Thank you. I'm glad you like it hehe. I couldn't think of anything to write na kasi for end notes hahahaha. Should I change the ending part tho? 😂😂
Nooo don't change it. The ending gave another vibe kumbaga may different flavor sa mga serious na poem haha. You can create another one with a different ending, you have this poetic skills😁
HAHAHHAHA buti na lang! I cannot relate to my own poem na pag nagkataon hahaha. I'm not realy into sweet things eh hahaha. I'll try to create another one. I just need some inspiration hahahha char. Feeling writer na talaga eh 😂😂. And by the way. Thank you for the compliment hehe. It motivates me to keep on writing ate Charlotte ✊❣️❣️
Keep on writing😁😁 kahit di sweet and stuffs other topic will do. Try to write about things you love, then you can experiment by writing about something you less like haha
Thank you. I'll take that advice and i'll keep that in mind hehe. You also write very well. And I admire you for that too. 🤗💕
Thank you for that, well appreciated😁
Song or poem??
It's a poem for now @Saif6878 . And if you like, you can turn it into a song, we'll just need some rhythm hehe.
Wow , be dami talent, kuha mo din yan no? Ganda ng poem mo, tapos bat ganon 🤣🤣 yung huli 😂
hahahaha di ko naman talent yan eh haha. Nagtry pa lang din ako, kaya medyo nagkaganun sa last part. Gumana na naman kaconyohan ko haha😂. Should I change it tho ate? Should I turn it into sweet one? Pero baka cringey na kasi pag nagkataon hahahah
No, it's good na, haha I kike the ending nga ee, ang kulit mo hahaha 😂
buti na lang hahahhahaha
feeling pwet pero poet! AHHHAHA BET KO ENDING BHIE! SANA DUMATING NA DIN INORDER Q! anyways u take on poetry na din pala huhuhu ano pa ba di mo kayang gawin grabe ka naman mamaw huhu
hooy pwet ka rin HAHAHAH. Puro delivery na lang kasi kasiyahan natin ngayon, salamat kay shopee nainspire ako. 😂 Nagatry pa lang ako at nagpapakafeeling poet eh HAHAHA. Ano di ko kayang gawin? Bhie, PAGKANTA BHIEE and many moreee HUHU. Sabi ko kasi bigyan mo naman ako ng ket konting pagkaangelic ng voice eh hahahha. Ikaw ang mamaw jan. RAwr 😂
HAHAHAHHAHA PWET TULOY TAYO BOTH
HAHAHAHHA IKAW NA LANG BHIE 😂
ayos na talaga HAHHAHAHAHAHHA kala mo talaga may bebe na sa last part pero bat ganon @bbang HAHHAHAHA
HAHAHAHAHHAHA kasi ngaa. Wala akong jowaaa (happy? ☺️). Tsaka I'm not into sweet things you know. It's kinda cringey hahahahha. Di ako makakarelate sa sarili kong poem pag ganun noh HAHAHAHAHA.
Yessyuff bhi3 HHAHAHAHHA sweet personality doesn't suits you.Feel ko tatayo mga balahibo q pag nagkataon HAHHAHAHAHAHAH wag bhi3,place lungs😭😭✋✋
HAHAHAHAHAHHA lol. Mwahh 😙😚
disappointed sa ending lods hahaha,kala ko u tasted something else wink wink hahaha jk. napaka versatile mo talaga,ikaw na talaga ang THE BANG huha💙
HAHAHA no di pwede muna yang wink wink mo jaaan. Sa sunod na lang when I got to taste it na lang din HAHAHAHHAAH charottt. Si shopee muna at j&t inspiration ko for now. Tagal ng jowa ko eh HAHAHAHHA. Anyways, thank youu for liking my poem! Di naman ako versatile masyado, onti lang hahaha. Naenjoy ko lang talaga trying different things hehe.
apaka humble talaga💙
wushuu. Onti lang din HAHAHA.
sana all may delivery,but the question is,is he cute?hahahaha and i thought that u tasted something else wink wink,u R THE BANG💙SMORE PLS
HAHAHAHAH hoy nakasend na rin yung isa mong comment. Nagself doubt ka rin ba, kala mo spammer ka talaga HAHAHAHHA. Anyways, wala pang cute na nagdeliver sakin too bad🤧. I appreciate that "The bang" HAHAHA para akong theory. You know what I mean hahahahahha 😂😂
More poems please! Hahahahaha. Kinikilig na ako, tapos in the end you just have your delivery pala. 😂😂😂 Btw, you are doing great in poetry. I hope I could read more of your works soon. ♥️
I'm so glad you liked and spared some time to read it! Thank you very much for the motivation you give to me. Always. I'll try my best to keep on writing stuffs and share it with youuu 😘🤗💕
Like what I'm always telling you, you are welcome and you deserve my support. ❤️😘😍 Can't wait for more poems and articles. Also, try writing Tagalog poems too.
huhu I wanna cryy. 🤧 I'll keep on trying my best to publish quality articles as possible. And I'll surely consider writing some tagalog poems as well 👉👈
Can't wait for that. I'm sorry for the late reply on this. 😁😂
hehe it's okay. Medyo magulo din talaga sa notifications eh. Baka natabunan na haha
Oo nga eh. 😂
I've saw your comment to Ebuzzydagr8's poem contest. This is great actually. I hope the quality of my 'poems' are like this :))
Thank you for appreciating my poem kuyaa. I'm flattered with your words hehe. And I really love your poems too! That's the real quality of poems, you are the real poet here and I'm glad you liked my composition 🤗💕💕. Actually, nainspire and motivate ako magsulat ng poems because of your works hehe. Napakamakata 😅❤️
And ganda. feel na feel ko habang binabasa ko yong poem mo😍 tapus yong ending delivery lang naman pala. 😁 you have a talent dear. Parang di naman newbie young nagsulat. 😊
hehehe I'm glad you took some time to read it 😅😊 And sorry for disappointing you on the last part hahahha. Anyways, I'm so flattered with your words hehe. It really means a lot to me and motivates me even more to keep on writing. Thank you very much ate for sparing me some of your time 🤗💕💕
Haha. Not a prob. Good points as a writer young nadadala mo readers mo. 😊 keep up you good works. You have a future on it.
Thank you very for the motivation ateee 🤗💕. It really means a lot to me. You too have a future in writing. Please keep writing and sharing your thoughts as well 😊
Your welcome. 🥰 thank you din. 😊
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Hahaha..you actually made me laugh at the last part ,pardon for I was expecting something else and oh that boom!it was only the delivery boy or did i missed some points? hehe..I love poems actually and kinda made some also but not fun like this of yours,hoping to read more..😊
I'm glad that this poem had that impact with you hahaha. I was actually having second thoughts about posting this before parang waley kase with the delivery boy hahahaha and first time ko rin magsulat na di para sa school. Pero buti na lang okay naman feedback mo hahahhaha. Anyways, I want and look forward to reading some of your poems as well. I'm glad nakameet na naman ako ng isa pang poet 🤗. May pinost ka na bang article about it? hehe
Your poem is really good. Your reader wouldnt expect its twist..hehe..Ahmn,not considering myself as a poet,haha,just loving to create one my one way of expressing my emotions..and yes I already published two,maybe you would care to take a look if you would like to. hehe
You may not consider yourself as a poet but I do hahaha. Automatic na yan sakin pag nagsusulat ng poems eh hahahhahaha. I would love to read it! Wait lang check kooo hihi
Is that so?hahah..well its my pleasure to be called a poet by a poet..Thank u in advance..feel free to leave some corrections..hehe
ay grabe haha. Aki ang hindi poet noh haha. Wannabe pa lang 😂. Anyways, no need naman nang magleave ng corrections atee. Perfect na gawa mo eh ❤
Hindi ah,ganda kaya ng poem mo in your own way na may unexpected twist na may fun..gawa ka ng iba,mg.aabang ako..hehe..anyway thank u,pareho lang tayo maganda poem pro hndi naman un perfect hndi nga ako confident sa grammar bahala na c batman..hehe