Chapter Two:The Old Cabin(Part 1)

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4 Years have past and chloe's a teenager now. She's on higher school now. For the past years of migration in the West city, Chloe's been active at school. She was one of the top student of there school and being top is pretty hard for her but she always accept that challenge.

At her home, she always study a lot with the help of Liza(her older sister) and as the school time comes, she's pretty active in all her class that's why she's being famous at her school.

One day they head to a field trip. Chloe and her friends (Tim and Sasha)ride at the school bus together with the 12 students and their teacher(Mrs. Claude)but they see something wrong.The school driver today wasn't the normal driver they've always seen and seems a different person and an outsider. But they just ignore it and Chloe think that there school bus driver must take a break for this day. Then as the time comes, off they go to the trip.As they know there were going to a museum near the East city but there were wrong...

30 mins later, Mrs. Claude suddenly stood up to go near the driver seat and ask the driver something, seems that she's angry and disappoint face to the driver.As the minute goes the bus suddenly stopped that Mrs. Claude almost rolled in the front. It stopped in an unknown road with a near forest. The bus they ride started to change its new appearance into rusty old bus. But due to the distraction of stopping they didn't notice it.

Mrs. Claude shout" What are you doing, your supposed to bring us to the museum and where are we!". Then the driver laughed soundly"HA HA HA HA HA HA" with his scary voice. "You are here!"He said. The whole class was shocked by the way the driver's spoken. Suddenly, something bumped on the side of a bus,it's like a truck that meant to hit in purpose. They look at the side where it hits but they see nothing. One of the student shout" Ahhhhhhh! Mrs. Claude. " Everyone see the horrifying scene onto Mrs. Claude. She hit her head at the steel door of the bus and must be broken. Her blood leaked outside the door.They almost panicked that all student including Chloe and her friends run out off the bus to seek for help. They scattered at the forest that Chloe, Tim, and Sasha were off the trail.

As they ran off the forest they seen no other houses, no people and non other than the trees. Tim asked Chloe" Hey Chloe, when ran out off the bus have you seen the driver? " He asked. But Chloe just stare at him. "Where are the others? " Sasha cried. Then Chloe Answered " I don't know but we have to stick together and find help", she's scared but she has to be brave for thier own sake. It's been hours later that they are walking but no sighting of hope. They know that if they couldn't find shelter by the end of the day. It'll be dangerous for them in the middle of nowhere. A little more minutes left and it'll be dark." Chloe, look! " Sasha shouted. "It's a cabin, let's take a look." Tim said. They ran quickly to check if there someone in the cabin. They knocked at the door." Hello is anyone there? Helloooo.. Please.. Is anyone could help us...." They cried. Then the door open with a scary sound."kkkkkkkrrrrrrrrrrrrrr. Come in" A voice of a witch like woman answered. They doubted to come in but they have no choice but to go in there.

As they go in they see a woman chopping onions, his cooking at a litle kitchen and they said to him." Could you please help us, we beg of you. We are lost. Our teacher Mrs. Claude needs help. She must be treated quickly, she must be still alive right now." The woman smiled " Have a sit my dears, dinner almost ready" that's the only word she said so they just take there sit and because they're hungry due to so tired of walking they didn't force the woman.

As they're sitting. The woman ready thier dinner. It's a soup. But she ready 5 plates instead of 4. Chloe asked" Hi, but could I ask something but first I'll intruduce you myself, I am Chloe and this are my friend Tim and Sasha. May I asked what is your name and why is it you have some extra plate but we're only 4 in here .". "I am Helia, but you can call me aunt hel if you want to, I lived with my husband here and his going to come home now but we should eat now before this soup cold. Help yourselves dear and after that you could rest and tomorrow we'll talk about what you need. Okay" the woman said. They eat the dinner and due to hunger they eat fast as they could because the soup seems so delicious. As they finished their dinner. "Alright dear. Come with me I'll show you your room." The woman guides them in the room. " You have to sleep now cause it's late and you must be tired of having your field trip so sleep now dears."

To be continue..

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Thank you friend, I'll try my best to make it more organized as you advice😊

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Interesting, surely HEL is a serial killer grandmother or maybe a demonic entity, we'll see.

Please beautify your publications more, give format to your dialogues so that they look more organized, and you can receive more support, because as they are, they give the impression that the story was made on the run.

Hopefully and take my suggestions in a good way, which are to help you be more successful.

Your story is good, but as I have been telling you, you must fix those things so that your audience has a better impression of you.

I'll be waiting for the next chapter, take your time and do something good, you're on the right track.

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