@Iremori
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Count to Ten
One You feel your tears run Two There's no one but you Three You try to break free Four You struggle some more Five Try to keep yourself alive Six You fall on leaves and sticks Seven You feel your pain worsen Eight It already too late Nine You know you'll never be fine Ten You died in vain Then you wake up in the cabin And you're tied up again
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One of the best poems I read so far here. This is clear poetry, a poem most people will understand and who knows they might even like reading and writing it. It reminds me of the schoolyard. .. I think @heartbeat1515 and @marblely might like this too. If you like to post in a community you might consider Freewriting or Poems. SYT: Poems https://read.cash/c/syt-poems-bd19 Freewriting https://read.cash/c/freewriting-c99e
Oh, thank you very much. I will do that when I write another one. And thank you again for reading.
You are welcome. I'll follow you and will read you again. Keep writing. What you write here is to promote you, your skills not only here but to the outside world as well. 🍀💕
Thanks, that makes me feel a bit better. 🙂
Stick around with the good writers, read each other. You read and commented me which made me read, like, comment and follow you. There are good writers here. Hopefully more will join, a part will grow into writing. 🍀
I'm also hoping that more writers join. Thank you very much for your time.
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Thanks for the upvote too. It kinda makes me sad that only a few people read my work. I'm grateful that you read mine.
It makes me sad good writers are ignored. We try to change that with our communities and go for quality not quantity. The community freewriting hosted the first writing contest here. Pity you joined later. We hope to have some more contests but the money for that needs to be earned first plus it has to help the "underdogs" here to be noticed. If you scroll through my account you can find those posts back I wrote where I asked users/participants to read each other. Great posts are ignored because no one reads. The main group of users upvotes for a different reason. Perhaps they can not read well enough to recognize something good? 🤔
It makes me happy that you liked my work. Maybe they just don't like the messages that I put in mine. Which actually isn't common since I'm writing about death, broken dreams, and my own depression.
The first problem will be the high amount of accounts 11k) and the high quantity of short notes and "articles". It's hard to be noticed and if we all stay on our island we will not discover new or better articles. You need to search for it and as a writer, you need to promote yourself. The best way is by reading and commenting on others. I rather read what you write than the fake messages and nonsense shared. You might call yourself a writer for fun but you are a writer and a creative one. Don't let others tell you what to write, how to write especially not if it comes to poetry. You are creative and certain feelings are needed to express in the way you do. It's not different from writing song texts. If I add music to what you wrote the whole world loves it. A sponsor is nice but ask yourself if it's worth promoting someone if a/he doesn't read, comment, appreciate you. Write for you, it's the best thing you can do for you. Each writer has his own audience it just takes time to find it.
I guess you're right. Guess I've been looking for audience in wrong places.
Your audience will come. 🍀💕
Yep, thanks for your words of encouragement. I really appreciate it
You are welcome.
Don't give up easily.
I won't. Thanks for reading.
@wakeupkitty is right. Don't be discouraged. You will find your audience in time, friends even. You have us now supporting your work :) Just continue writing because you want to write and it is your passion and channel to release your emotions.
I will, thanks :)
Yes I did. @Iremori is good. Thank you for calling us here too. Glad I read them.
Thanks, @wakeupkitty for calling me here. You are right, I like reading this. My first impression is ouch, ouch and ouch. It reminds me of a movie. Cabin in the woods 🤔 It is sad and painful especially a repetitive situation. The feelings are expressed beautifully.
Thanks. I did think of Cabin in the Woods as the inspiration.
You're welcome. I would be glad to have this in SYT: Poems.
This is really cool @Iremori. My first thought was the school's nursery rhyme but this is well beyond and darker than a nursery rhyme. It felt a bit like Blair Witch Project. You can sing this too, come to think of it and join @heartbeat1515's Share Your Talents Community: https://read.cash/c/share-your-talents-f01d :) Glad we have you here!
I haven't watched Blair Witch yet, but it seems interesting. I'll watch it someday. I'll do my best to make more poems like this. Thanks.
It will make a great children's song for kindergarten. Since we don't have kindergarten we'll teach it to the 2.5-4 year old toddlers. 😄
A song that teaches how to count and learn a little bit of life.
And how to survive in kindergarten if mom leaves 😢
I haven't been there yet. Someday I will understand the feelings.
You won't your child might and if not you might not like it 😄
😅 That sounds like a scary future but I am going to face it with a smile. Hopefully 😅
Time to let go 👋
That is the one part that I do not how I will face it. Will I be brave or will I be depressed.
You will find it normal.
I believe you.
Thanks for promoting the community. I do need a new songs for the community. I haven't been able to write one myself. The community is drifting.
Most who sings, would be able to sing cover songs but writing, composing and singing own songs does require some special talent like yours and I worry not many will be able to.
I believe there are some hidden talents here. Hopefully they come fowards. I also not very good myself.
Um, I'm kind of good at writing and singing songs
I will be happy to listen to your original songs in Share Your Talent community. https://read.cash/c/share-your-talents-f01d