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Shuttered World
Rain is pouring so hard that tears of mine blends to it I think of dying as the best shortcut to exit Buzzing here buzzing there, I couldn't hear my thought My heart beats so fast and loud that I was wrought How can I reach victory is the tagline of me How can I escape of this pain, for this has no remedy I was told that I am not enough I give my best even if it's tough! Whose hand will I be holding this time? You gave up and always cross the line How could you hurt me so bad? Puzzled and uncertain if I could heal my soul You told me to face life and fight from head to sole But why did you leave me as if yesterday was just a play? You could have ignore me if you don't want to stay Now tell me with the word unfold Do you want me to live a shuttered world? I hope you don't for neither do I But if you do, please let me know right into mine eye So I'll prepare my heart for the crushing sound That would break me down to the ground But if you could then tell me to stay as the days of old And comfort that I'm not alone in this shuttered world
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I've tried hurting myself before too because feeling the physical pain is better than emotional pain. But I'm all good now. I just remembered it because of this article. Another good article of yours 👍👍
Hi JasmineC! I'm a fan of yours. I admire your creativity in each and every piece you create. Just continue being you. You are wonderful!
Thank you Ansherina. You are also a great writer. And I am excited in seeing your new post every mow and then.
How I wish I could make this kind of poems you know. Anyway I'll get some ideas in your poems someday. I'll make my own poem too.
Yeah, you can learn from it. Keep reading and make things out for your writing career too. If you want, you can enroll on creative writing course. So you can write more in am effective way.
The first line: "mine tears" should be my tears. Sentences do end with a dot (.). I advice you to use Grammarly. It takes not even one minute.
Hi kitty, I appreciate your corrections but that's thw art of peotry, every poet has that kind of thing. I hope you can explore poetry too so you will know better on how each part works.
What exactly is the art of poetry dear? The mine or the dots or both? If you write in the old poetry style I suggest to do it with every word. Good luck. You write some real good content.
In that way you're right.
I am happy that you noticed it.
Congratulations for this wonderful and intense poem you wrote, truly touching and intimate, it arrives right there, at the bottom of the soul ...
I am glad that thw piece touches your heart. There will be more to come. Keep posted and I hope to see you there in my next articles.
> I am glad that thw piece touches your heart. There will be more to come. Keep posted and I hope to see you there in my next articles. I will try to follow you, compatibly with my commitments, I like this type of post, so you will feel at the next episode !!
Wow! That's heart warming approach. Thank you for that one. I will do the same, to support you here in read cash.
AS always you have such a good poems.