Am I pushing my descriptive language too far in this sentence.?

@rah 15 July 2022 more from that month

Am I pushing my descriptive language too far in this sentence.? Kaleidoscope to describe something rather colourless :D ________ I lay there in the stillness and as my eyes adjusted the pitch black, with the only exception being the streetlight peeping through the edge of the window blind, became a monochrome kaleidoscope of different greys. _____________

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@BitcoinBaby 15 July 2022

Nope its kinda fun to use that seemingly contrasting word, but maybe break it up its kinda long. I lay there in the stillness and as my eyes adjusted the pitch black. The only exception being the streetlight peeping through the edge of the window blind, became a monochrome kaleidoscope of different greys.
- @rah 15 July 2022
  
  I felt it was a blt long too tbh
  - @BitcoinBaby 15 July 2022
    
    It one of my traps, too long and too complicated because they sound so nice but are uneasy to the eyes if used too much, so nowadays I cut them up, unlike this one ;)