Illusions of salvation : notes for the shattered souls

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Don't tell me using countless words...that life is just an empty worthless dream..that your soul is slowly dying inside..

Take it this way: Things aren't really how it seems... life is real and yours is also real! Life is closer than death and being in a grave...a grave that should be your last ambition...If you are really a human.

You were created of soil, and there you will get back once you die, but between that, your goal is your destiny, achieving it is your fate, even if that means taking down a hungry lion and tear away his fangs and claws....you still have to do it!

This behaviour is what will make every tomorrow showing you the step ahead you took... to the future.

Your creativity is limitless, time is fading away and despite all of that courage and braveness you got in yourself...you looks like a ghost, with numb emotions and a heart that feels like a military funeral heading to the tomb. The sounds of muffled screams arround, and you are just there, arms crossed, watching everything drowning in a giant swamp of sadness...

In the battlefield of life, don't be the guided sheep , following the shephard blindly to the slaughterhouse. Instead, be the hero of this battle; forget about easy roads because it will get you nowhere; and let the dying past alone, bury the deads it killed

Do it, make it all happen in this same living moment with your still beating heart and the will of god in the skies.

Look at all the great ancients, and let their lives guide you, remind you that you can be bigger than them and it's possible to be as high as a mountain in place of getting lost in the mud. it's also a reminder to leave your footsteps there, on the sand of time, to let the next generations know who you were ; and maybe; just maybe another lost broken soul can find those steps you made and accepts to let you guide him to the way he can lit that flame again in his chest...The flame of hope.

The time has come...get up and rise, flick the dust of depression off your shoulders, go forward , don't look back and be ready for any tough times you might and surely will face. Learn how to fight,how to win and the most important : How to achieve.

This is all i was sent to tell you, as i'm fading away, my time here is over now...but your journey in this war called life to succeed.. has only begin, right here, and right now!

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This, @hamedbkh, was really very good. Just put a period after the word "killed" - and the first paragraph ends with two periods, it should be one or three, depending on what you want to express. Also note that there should be no space before colon or semicolon. You need to think of the interpunction. Otherwise this is very good.

Try to write more in this style.

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3 years ago

thanks for the advice! i don't usually write using this style so i expected some mistakes. but i tried to make it as good as i can. and im satisfied with the result. and yeah i will try and wriye in this style more. thanks for reading and for your notes friend! also for the tip. much appreciated :D

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3 years ago

It is nice for you to be guiding him in most of his articles.

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3 years ago

He wants to improve his writing, and I think he has potential a sa writer, so why not help him? Actually, we have become good friends as a result :) I have nothing against giving a helping hand. I have decades of experience of as well writing as editing, so why not share some of my experience with those who can and want to benefit from it? It can be a bit sensitive though, one cannot just complain about errors, some people would just be insulted. But there are also those who eagerly want to learn.

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3 years ago

I am not sure if these are notes for or from the shattered soul.

It's a clear message but a bit shorter might attract more readers. 👍💕

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3 years ago

I don't think it's very long, it's just the same length as normal articles. And as if it's for or from shattered soul, that's up to the reader to tell. It goes both ways. Thanks for reading!

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3 years ago

You are the writer it's up to you what you write, which words you use and how long you make it.

Feel free to ignore me. 💕

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3 years ago

I have no reason to ignore you, quite the opposite actually. Well as for the length i don't see any problem with that because that's the size of an average article. Also yes you are right. I'm the writer and I'm responsable for the meaning of it. I made it in a way so both explanations are true. In other words, the article is written to looks like an ex shattered soul is advising others.

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3 years ago

You did that well and I really hope many will read and understand it. You deserve it. You have a unique writing style. 👍💕

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3 years ago

Thank you very much. Your kind words literally made my day. I appreciate it!

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