@Bryskie
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Dinosaur baby
There was a sad dinosaur He did not any friend Every day the dinosaur sat on the grass He saw the dog and duck Were playing with a ball The duck rolled the ball and the dog ran to catch it. Suddenly the ball went far away Until it arrived to the dinosaur. The dinosaur went and gave them the ball The dog and the duck thanked and dinosaur. The dog and duck asked the dinosaur to play with them. The dinosaur became **happy**
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Can you edit this a bit? A short tale is fine and this good be a good one for little childrenn. Halfway the story, after the ball role to the dinosaur, it's no longer interesting. You should add some lines, change some words. For example give each animal a bit extra by expressing their character. A happy, enthusiastic, jumpy dog. A clumsy, noisy duck played together and were clearly friends. How did the dinosaur feel as it hid? Why should a dog and duck play with a dinosaur just because it returned a ball? I can assume it looks scary. Perhaps the dinosaur needed to prove it was not, they can talk about it? Remove this "Please accept it🙏😊" a story should not start with it. After you edited it you can submit again.